Always liked Nanako and Uthstar's work. Would love to see more.

That being said, I can't decide which is worse - the dialogue itself or the voice acting behind it. I think Nanako's voice is pretty spot on for what I expected, but "Snow" is just... I know we're going for demure and helpless here, but it comes off as nasally and grating on the ears.

Some of the dialog is phoning it in. I suppose if your only frame of reference is hentai subs or something similar, this is a pretty accurate immitation, but dirty talk in hentai sucks for the most part - no one talks like this during sex, and hearing it in english is kinda distracting.

Just my two cents and thoughts on how it can be improved. Still gonna fap. :U