MyNameIsOver20charac said:
Ok, so since it's my first time doing this I'd appreciate some feedback.

what I intend to send

Hi!
I recently found one of your art works which I found ABSOLUTLY ADORABLE! ^.^
Ehm. This is the art work:
https://www.deviantart.com/therealphoenix/art/umbreon-and-leafeon-419968366

If you say yes I will make sure that your artist name and a source link (seen above) will be easily found with your art.

While I'm at it: currently you have art posted on e621 under two different names. Would you like it to remain like this or should I fix it?

Thanks for making adorable art and I hope you allow me to spread it ^.^

Is it good? To unserious? Missed something? Feedback appreciated ^.^

The note lacks a clear motive, include what you intend to do in the beginning of the message.

Something like "I recently found this artwork that you have made, <link>, and I find it absolutely adorable! Would you mind if I reuploaded it onto e621.net? If you say yes..." would suffice.

I would exclude the "While I'm at it" part until the next note/reply though, keep it to one topic per note.