Fantastic work, man :D

Very well done zziowin :)

This is great for a first ever! but don't let that stop you from improving,

those moon symbols on Luna's ass look like eyes

Can't stop laughing

Amazing just wow is perfect :D

mhmmm oh hell yes so nicely done keep it up more like these please maybe Celesta an futa Twilight? or an futa Celesta ;)

Certainly, this is one of the greatest first-tries ever.

So for your second video my I suggest maybe getting some voice actresses to do some work for you. Most of the sounds you used 2 to 3 times maybe some variety with the moans would make it sound unique. But otherwise great job.

ChicagoTypewritter said:
those moon symbols on Luna's ass look like eyes

Can't stop laughing

...fuck xD

KoRnBrony said:
This is great for a first ever! but don't let that stop you from improving,

The greatest flaw you can have, is to be unable to improve.

Her mane is a bit TOO see through...

Other than that, animation is alright, clunky, sure, but in time that goes away.

Now does he read the comments/ go to this site?

I have no idea.

This was a great animation... Period. I watch YouTube a lot, and this was great compared to other things that I've seen! Keep at it, mate!

Nice

Look out Blackjr....you definitely have some competition!!

Firestar322 said:
Look out Blackjr....you definitely have some competition!!

both just use colored human bodys and slap a horsehead on it .. waste of talent

Woah! Definitely one of the top animations on this website in my opinion!

The hair could use a bit more animations, otherwise this is perfect <3

Cadance is so gonna be sore when she finds out.

Fucking 10/10

this is in my top 10 animation list now

Firestar322 said:
Look out Blackjr....you definitely have some competition!!

He never had any competition, blackjr makes crappy 20 sec animations and makes 154 posts of the different angles. this is effort and jr should learn from this guy.

LeClercMan said:
He never had any competition, blackjr makes crappy 20 sec animations and makes 154 posts of the different angles. this is effort and jr should learn from this guy.

Blackjr doesn't post the angles or full animations to e621 he uploads full animations to his tumblr (Excluding the angles)

For anyone wondering, the song during the title sequence is Rhiannon by Essáy & Stumbleine:
www.youtube.com/watch?v=eB9n7vuPBxk

idk about this one. its not bad but he really needs to work on female and male noises. otherwise it kills it.

one of those things i kinda want to leave the sound off for.

good work though

Something I haven't seen mentioned yet;

Is it just me, or does Shining's chest and upper arms have way too much muscle definition? If the arms were thicker, I could maybe see the justification, but I feel like the muscles need to be toned down a bit to really fit in with the rest of the body.

It isn't really an apparent problem until after 3:36.

I'd also suggest adding a bit of muscle definition to the neck, just for the sake of smoothing the transition between head and body.

Otherwise, fucking beautiful work for a first time. Audio didn't personally bug me, but there's definitely room for improvement.

Krownleth said:
both just use colored human bodys and slap a horsehead on it .. waste of talent

Clearly you have the most talent out of all the artists, seemingly can do a better job, and can somehow make models from scratch without knowing how to use Zbrush or Maya. I didn't think so.

Next time, use the blacklist, instead of trying to be a self-proclaimed expert, don't quit your day job of being a paid critic. Good day.

The models do look like they could use some work around the neck area in particular where it's pretty obvious they weren't intended to fit each other. (body having some amazing reflective effects and blemishing while the heads are a bit plastic-y and uniform.) I've no complaints over the animation side of things. It's obvious that you know how a body moves here and all you really need to work on is the models and then maybe some of the sound effects though even the sound effects were far from the worst I've seen.

some of the moans were a bit...
earrapey.

only thing that bugs me is shinings body. especially where his neck connects to his body. other than that this is great. like the facial expressions. keep it up!

this is not my thing, as everything looks too human, from cock to body and..everything really.

But that aside, this is very well done. the animation is smooth in most places, there's relatively no clipping I can see... I'm a writer not an animator, so take my words with a truck of salt, but yeah, good work. ^^ would be awesome to see you work with some feral models using this animation style. Nice work.

might as well suppert

GalloViking said:
The hair could use a bit more animations, otherwise this is perfect <3

Getting the hair right on the princesses in 3D is an unsolved problem right now in my opinion. The best I've seen so far is 2snack's demo here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cOXNjtwI91o#t=1m9s

That moment of penetration is the hottest thing ever...

REadding voice actor and actress artist tag "Dragon-V0942" and "Deadsquid" as our voices were used for this animation.
Please read the tag history for more information, zziowin.
Since our voice samples from post #523891 were used and not credited from within the video. Credit from within e621's artist tag is needed and appreciated.

Dragon-V0942 said:
REadding voice actor and actress artist tag "Dragon-V0942" and "Deadsquid" as our voices were used for this animation.
Please read the tag history for more information, zziowin.
Since our voice samples from post #523891 were used and not credited from within the video. Credit from within e621's artist tag is needed and appreciated.

Alright, If you're an author of the voice acting I see no problem in adding your tags. I found the sounds on https://sfmlab.com/item/273/ and there wasn't written about who made the sounds

zziowin said:
Alright, If you're an author of the voice acting I see no problem in adding your tags. I found the sounds on https://sfmlab.com/item/273/ and there wasn't written about who made the sounds

That's understandable, I've noticed those samples being distributed from there as well which I found kind of odd.
So don't worry all that much, you're not the only person I had to deal with regarding this particular matter of those sounds being obtained from SFMLabs.

Though while I have you here I'd like to take this moment to congratulate you on your beautifully fully fledged animation here, I've been sharing this with a lot of my friends.
Although I don't know if the lack of wings and tails was a choice or simply because the bone locking was a bit too tedious for you.
If so I would like to offer my assistance or tips if you're interested.
Hell, I'd even make you original voice samples if you'll ever need them again.

If you're not interested that's fine, I wish you the best of luck and I can't wait to see what you'll do next.

PS: I have saved this animation onto my PC, THAT'S how much I like it. ^.=.~

Firestar322 said:
Look out Blackjr....you definitely have some competition!!

thats my dream in reality.

This looks incredibly good for a first try. Would really like to see it with wings and tail, but I understand that's probably difficult to do. Can't wait to see more.

I think that it is very good work, but the only thing that is missing is their tails, I mean they are anthromorphic ponies and I think they should have tails and Princess Luna needs to have wings as well.

Models : 3/10
Scenes : 5/10
Where is tails ?

Not a brony, but goddamn that was hot! Nice work :3

Wonderfully done, hope to see more of your work in the year to come.

This is some of the best stuff on the site. and I'm not even a brony.

Beautifully done, but they both are missing tails and Luna is missing her wings