You've learned nothing, about speaking your thoughts.

shapie said:
You've learned nothing, about speaking your thoughts.

...Oh look! Another red button! boop.

That concerned expression is priceless

Gotta say, while I generally love these comic series, sometimes I feel like the characters are a touch too eloquent, verbose, and philosophical for what they're seemingly SUPPOSED to be, character-wise. Like, I'd dare to call myself reasonably intelligent but I don't wax poetic about the nature of life and happiness at the flip of a switch. Kinda breaks the flow of the story for me when they get into those soliloquies too hard. I know this story's already done, but maybe something to look at in the future. More show, less tell.

NO I WAS GETTING SO INVESTED TONIGHT

HAHAHAHAH

THE PENNY FINALLY DROPED :d

well Shit bwo ..

what ya gunna now you cant run..? . . fok

also i hope this is Not Frostys life put forward into the stage of this young fella

we all gotta learn n practice to get better

All he needs is the red exclamation point above his head

HOL UP-

thundershocker said:
Gotta say, while I generally love these comic series, sometimes I feel like the characters are a touch too eloquent, verbose, and philosophical for what they're seemingly SUPPOSED to be, character-wise. Like, I'd dare to call myself reasonably intelligent but I don't wax poetic about the nature of life and happiness at the flip of a switch. Kinda breaks the flow of the story for me when they get into those soliloquies too hard. I know this story's already done, but maybe something to look at in the future. More show, less tell.

I appreciate and respect your thought. My words, ideas and presentation are not everyone's cup of tea and that's definitely fair. I just write and tell the things in the way that I would want to see more of out there. It may not always flow so well or may even seem out of character at times but that's kind of the way I like it. Part of my personal quirks as an individual. Glad to have you along for the ride, friend.

that last panel, his thoughts:Hold upwait a minutesomethin aint right

Personaly i like the elequince and flowery language of the lines.i find it makes it feels much more like an actual story then just porn with thinly lased plot.at first i statrted following for the porn, but now i honest read the stories regaurdless of the porn.

Realisation

Ooh and the penny drops. Well now she can just talk to him instead of doing her usual performance. Maybe something nice will come of it.

Hold up.

Oh no.

Rob be like...

And so the beat is skipped.

Wait a minute. I was talking to myself.....

hol' up, wait a minute

mirrorstatic said:
Personaly i like the elequince and flowery language of the lines.i find it makes it feels much more like an actual story then just porn with thinly lased plot.at first i statrted following for the porn, but now i honest read the stories regaurdless of the porn.

I'm grateful that you do enjoy it because it's something I hope to see more of in mainstream eroticism. There's nothing wrong with straight to the point porn, nothing at all. There's a place for everything, and I am hopeful stories as what I work on might inspire others or give them the confidence to try it out themselves.

thundershocker said:
Gotta say, while I generally love these comic series, sometimes I feel like the characters are a touch too eloquent, verbose, and philosophical for what they're seemingly SUPPOSED to be, character-wise. Like, I'd dare to call myself reasonably intelligent but I don't wax poetic about the nature of life and happiness at the flip of a switch. Kinda breaks the flow of the story for me when they get into those soliloquies too hard. I know this story's already done, but maybe something to look at in the future. More show, less tell.

I personally disagree. I don’t feel like what our protagonist here said was too deep for him.
He’s barely had anyone to talk to besides his goldfish, and the second his childhood hero stands before him, doing something he could only aspire to do, of course he’d wanna speak his mind, especially since he won’t be judged by a robot. Or at least, it seemed that way at first

thundershocker said:
Gotta say, while I generally love these comic series, sometimes I feel like the characters are a touch too eloquent, verbose, and philosophical for what they're seemingly SUPPOSED to be, character-wise. Like, I'd dare to call myself reasonably intelligent but I don't wax poetic about the nature of life and happiness at the flip of a switch. Kinda breaks the flow of the story for me when they get into those soliloquies too hard. I know this story's already done, but maybe something to look at in the future. More show, less tell.

people do tend to be more introspective when they think they are alone

mirrorstatic said:
Personaly i like the elequince and flowery language of the lines.i find it makes it feels much more like an actual story then just porn with thinly lased plot.at first i statrted following for the porn, but now i honest read the stories regaurdless of the porn.

I think it makes the porn feel hotter to be honest, like reading a saucy novel with some visual aid, that being said this comic could be completely sfw and I think I'd be hooked

And yeah I don't think eloquence and thinking out your writing should be criticized, sure it's definitely possible to overthink and over explain, but as an up n coming writer and artist, all that thinking can do is help you improve, and speaking those thoughts to no one is entirely in character for this kinda person, even if their art is stagework or they don't do art at all but feel they have to act for everyone else