Topic: Need help/input on a story.

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Earlier this year, I began working on what at the time seemed like a series of short stories. Unlike most series around the internet, I was going for a focus on somewhat realistic sci-fi. I've already been working on the bare basis: a perfect world filled with imperfections.

The story itself is set in a time after Earth has ended. A group of three long-time friends and the crew of their vessel were exploring space and found a world similar to the late Earth. Each friend also happened to be experienced in a specific branch of science/technology; robotics, biology, and pathology. They each used this experience to modify themselves and become their own definitions of immortal.
Gachirin: Biologist/geneticist. Turned himself into a dragon-kin.
Noblesse Supplice: Engineer/programmer [And no the story is not centered around me.] Transferred consciousness into robotic body <Inspired by Chappie>
Shinigami Kai: Virologist. Rendered undead after years of experiments.

Current races [Subspecies]
Daitengu [Black, Elder, Prime]
Kitsune [Crimson, Mini, Silver, Snow, Tanned]
Isonade [Black-Tipped, Long-Tailed, Smooth-Skinned]
Nekomata [Mountains, Spotted, Stripped, Woodlands]
Okami [Forest, Frost, Maned, Moonlit]
Tsuchinoko [Gilded, Hooded, Thorny]

There are currently eight true shape-shifters. 6 of which serve as guardians to the races. They are not gods, but they can be as fearsome as one when necessary.
Amaterasu, Entei, Inari, Izanami, Omoikane, Raijin, Suijin, and Ugajin

As for technology, I have a few... interesting concepts. One such concept being the 'Cherry Popper' Cluster grenade and 'Hellstorm' incendiary.

Feel free to ask questions as needed.

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So far the main story is centered around the royal families of the Kitsune and Okami; specifically, the princess [Rayne] and her guard [Ehren].

Current character roster... [full list as of right now.]
Administrators ['Gods']: Aphelion, Gachirin, Noblesse Supplice, and Shinigami Kai
Daitengu: Angelique, Evangel, Gabriel, and Valentine
Elysians [A.I.]: Bella, Kyra, Sigmund, Victor, and Xia
Helionites [dragons]: Caeneus, Cassandra, Daedalus, Electra, Icarus, Lazarus, Niobe, and Orpheus
Humans: Ricardo
Isonade: Kakashi, Mikhaila, and Meredith
Jogauni [probable]: Magnolia
Kayeer [probable]: Latona and Tellus
Kitsune: Ehren, Fawkes, Lilium, Morgan, Nathaniel, Phoenix, Veritatis, Vincent
Nekomata: Novem
Okami: Allison, Berlioz, Fenrir, Freya, Nikolai, Rayne, and Samael
Sergal [probable]: Trinity
Shifters: Amaterasu, Entei, Inari, Izanami, Omoikane, Raijin, Suijin, and Ugajin
Tsuchinoko: Delmar, Mary, and Theodore

Now then to explain the foreign races...
My plan was for humanity to be lured to Helion by a false signal, only to be enslaved by the dragons.
The plan for Jogauni, Kayeer, Sergals, etc. is that other races found the world, named Arteria, through the use of multi-versal portal use.

Edit:
I've also incorporated a few city concepts [currently no visuals exist.]

I'll be uploading the data to my DeviantArt account...

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Lance_Armstrong said:
Now that's a system of worship @NotMeNotYou and friends can get behind.

While that was partially the joke behind, I figured since mortals could never truly be considered gods it was a far more fitting title.

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Sorry about this long overdue update but here we go...
Status Update: 10.30.2016...

Unfortunately I will not be able to provide much information as to the changes, but I can give out small tidbits.
-Removed copyrighted materials [Races, brands, etc.]
-Changed character names.
-Incorporated Equine and Ursine races.
-Changed the classification of gods from 'Administrators' [Still thinking of new title].
-Currently working on factions.
-Incorporated more worlds.
-Changed names of weaponry [and added some new/improved variations of previous ideas].
-Still working on naming the continents/lands.
-Still refining the bestiary [by world].
-Still working on cultures.

When all is said and done, I hope that this work will be worth it.

Also, I hope to have little references to well-known artists on this site. [no guarantees, however.]

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