I always go straight to the point, but sometimes going straight to the point may make me fail to explain things. Also, it does not look as "professional" as it should.

I need help with writing.

A common tactic is to start with the opening, then do the closing. You write the explanation between these two points.

In order to really help, we'd need details. But to give you some general ideas to flesh things out:

Have an ending in mind that you want to have. Work backwards from there.

Have bullet points on X, Y and Z happened, etc. to see how events flow.

Write out an overall arc/ideas you want and try to fit them in order of events and try to stick to it. Once you do, flesh the folks/story out.

When fleshing out a story, try to avoid "X and then Y" when writing. Do "because X, therefore Y" instead. It helps keep the story focused and provides explanations for scenes. For example:

"Brian kissed Joey's girlfriend Jessica, and then Joey walked in on them." ❌
The scene's pace is too quick. The sequence of events can come off as random or by coincidence due to no context explaining the scene.

"Because Joey's girlfriend Jessica is alone with his best friend Brian, Joey started feeling nervous. Therefore, Joey went upstairs and confirmed his suspicions as walked in on them kissing each other." ✅
The scene now has some context and isn't random or by chance. The reader now knows more about why each character did what they did and is now interested on what happens next.

It should be noted that you should not start off every sentence with "because; therefore", just use it as a literary device to explain the plot and keep it on track. Writing is fun, yo

I like how everybody is just pitching in with advice without even asking for a sample of his writing.

lonelylupine said:
I like how everybody is just pitching in with advice without even asking for a sample of his writing.

He refused to immediately offer samples, so he just wants advice in general. That was obvious, nobody would ever ask without supplying samples if they wanted more direct directions that would require those samples.

Instead of explaination you could use implication. It's a bit hard to explain but I try.

Connections
Let's say I write: "He drove his Ferrari on the highway" - Readers surely would connect Ferrari and Highway to the implication that he drove very fast. If I write "he took a VW Polo" instead things surely would be imagined a bit slower.

That's actually taught to police officers for interviewing witnesses - "The sport car drove away fast", but maybe it was slow and the witness just made the connection sport cars = fast

Reasons
If we move to a fantasy setting we could say "The hero left his bow and packed the heavy crossbow instead for hunting the Ogre". Now there could be lines about how Ogres have thick skin, wear armor and such.... but just mentioning that a heavier weapon is needed implies that a simple arrow probably won't be enough.

Or having a reason for things to exist in the world. World War 2 technology to fight against mutated monsters that roam the earth for like 100 years already - why would anybody invest time in having fighter planes? The story needs flying monsters to justify the existance of those machines, as they would otherwise be without purpose.

Prior information
Let's stick with monsters - "The beast watched it's prey aimlessly wandering through the pitch black night". We have the information that this thing can see pretty well in the dark, and if somebody starts to lid a torch to enter the den of the monster it implies that a torch might blind it. So when a fight happens and the beast seems not being able to aim it's attacks it would be redundant to point out that it can't see well due to the light

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I hope that somewhat helped you

furrin_gok said:
He refused to immediately offer samples, so he just wants advice in general. That was obvious, nobody would ever ask without supplying samples if they wanted more direct directions that would require those samples.

How can you give advice on improvement if you don't even know what is wrong?

And no, he didn't "refuse" to provide a sample, he neglected to provide a sample. Those words mean different things.

There is no shortage of excellent general writing advice on the internet, specially better than what he is getting here: he could try Mark Twain's Rules of Writing or Kurt Vonnegut's Rules for Writing or this essay by Chuck Palahniuk (and he's right, I absolutely do hate him, because what he is suggesting is hard and also right.)

lonelylupine said:
How can you give advice on improvement if you don't even know what is wrong?

And no, he didn't "refuse" to provide a sample, he neglected to provide a sample.

Here's the main thing that writing can do that art can't: Give general good advice without seeing the piece of work in question. In art, you have to see what's wrong and where you need to give advice on because everyone's understanding of a given thing is different. But in writing, you can give a general advice on things and still help out because writing have a frame/system that most, if not all, writing sticks to for the reader can understand. Where as in art, anyone can do a given thing 200 different ways and no one can fully agree what something should be done, sight unseen.