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What's with Fluttershy's neck in 9th panel?

Th3Shad0w3d0n3 said:
What's with Fluttershy's neck in 9th panel?

Long neck is long.

Th3Shad0w3d0n3 said:
What's with Fluttershy's neck in 9th panel?

because its derp and i failed ._. *hangs head in shame.*

kitsuneyoukai said:
because its derp and i failed ._. *hangs head in shame.*

*pats you on back with broom*
There there. You tried right? You failed, but you tried...

Pinkie demanding quiet? This is some kind of mirror dimension.

Th3Shad0w3d0n3 said:
What's with Fluttershy's neck in 9th panel?

she is a giraffe pony didnt you know XD

kitsuneyoukai said:
because its derp and i failed ._. *hangs head in shame.*

Omg! I just want to say to you I have absolutely loved this comic you've made. It had its rough parts along the way, but I have looked forward to every page you've put out. Your art style is amazing too!

But rarity has no right to complain... He didn't do anything to her and the though doesn't count in this case.

Spike is not at fault what so ever you guts know that right?It was all Celestias fault for putting that spell book there.

And the whining will soon commence. Let's save the tl;dr where it's needed.

Falord said:
But rarity has no right to complain... He didn't do anything to her and the though doesn't count in this case.

i agree... but i'm not rarity, and i think that's how she'd really react. also, i'm trying to represent a range of opinions similar to our fans'. which works cuz i need a gigantic argument at this point in the comic anyway =P

This erotic comic turned into a drama? Why? D:

masterwave said:
This erotic comic turned into a drama? Why? D:

cuz we wanted to try it. =P it'll be porn again soon (page 59), and the resolution will hopefully make it feel good to fap to again : )

TwilightStormshi said:
i need a gigantic argument at this point in the comic anyway =P

And for that, the perfect way to incite dramas: bring as many friends into the conflict as possible, telling them only the information that would make them the most furious.
It's a pity Facebook doesn't exist in Equestria, or this would escalate MUCH faster.

Damn, this gets interesting page by page

Up to this point, you might as well close the discussion.

Th3Shad0w3d0n3 said:
What's with Fluttershy's neck in 9th panel?

Nope.avi

I like this drama. As even know he when mad with sex, he got to face up to what he did and not just let it pass by like wind.

kitsuneyoukai said:
because its derp and i failed ._. *hangs head in shame.*

Wanna see my drawings?

Then you know what failing means

kitsuneyoukai said:
because its derp and i failed ._. *hangs head in shame.*

RaritiesStallion said:
Omg! I just want to say to you I have absolutely loved this comic you've made. It had its rough parts along the way, but I have looked forward to every page you've put out. Your art style is amazing too!

yea i have to agree, this comic gives me something to do. besides all of the minor mistakes this is a very good comic, good job kitsuneyoukai!

Th3Shad0w3d0n3 said:
What's with Fluttershy's neck in 9th panel?

Nope.shy

-Frazzledragon said:
Pinkie demanding quiet? This is some kind of mirror dimension.

she just wants everyone to pay attention to her instead =P

God... Jesus... This is just like freaking Better Late then Never... So hooked up in the story, that it just becomes a little...
I dunno...
Tedious to read? It's not like I don't like drama (I read stephen king a LOT) but I mean... This is a porn comic featuring cartoon horses...
I better fuck off before I start a flame war.

If there is anypony doing anything wrong... it's Twilight. First she encouraged Spike's sex drive, seduced him into having intercourse MULTIPLE TIMES, and she is accusing him of being the pervert!?!

Also about Rarity, she can't blame Spike for having sexual thoughts about her. Also, I can tell that stallions that were staring at her rump daily during the mating season (which lasts a day apparently). This is also being hypocritical since she can't keep her lust of Prince Blueblood, even though he's a total jerk. Seriously, That's like saying if I gave someone a twelve pack of beer and I scold that person for getting drunk the next day.

But wait a minute, since when did Twilight learn how to read thoughts? She wasn't even there when Spike was peeping on Rarity.

Also, Applebloom came down on Spike, so I don't see how it's his fault.

I wouldn't be suprised if Twilight kills Spike and The Mane Six will celebrate with an orgy.

What? I'm following this story's logic.

Twilight is pissed off! Shit is going to get real!

jmlop0 said:
Spike is not at fault what so ever you guts know that right?It was all Celestias fault for putting that spell book there.

It would be Rarity and Twilight's fault.

Rarity for suggesting to have sex with Spike to begin with.

Twilight for causing all the drama.

Landocreeper said:
stuff

heat lasting a day is a small plot hole but a plot hole nonetheless.

they're all supposed to be acting stupidly. it's an argument. people are naturally stupid in arguments. i like how people just assume it's bad writing/ooc. parts of the writing -are- bad... but not that one. a lot of people are hooked, so i don't feel too bad. future comics will suck less.

fluttershy told twilight about spike's thoughts, which she figured out/assumed after he invaded her privacy. then twilight told rarity.

Th3Shad0w3d0n3 said:
What's with Fluttershy's neck in 9th panel?

RodneyShadow said:
she is a giraffe pony didnt you know XD

Giraffashy.

PonE-Sharp said:
Nope.avi

LOL

I just wanna know who's cussing in the last panel and what they're saying. Should be good...;)

Landocreeper said:
But wait a minute, since when did Twilight learn how to read thoughts? She wasn't even there when Spike was peeping on Rarity.

Maybe Fluttershy told her?

TwilightStormshi said:

fluttershy told twilight about spike's thoughts, which she figured out/assumed after he invaded her privacy. then twilight told rarity.

Ok... So how can FLUTTERSHY read thoughts!?!

i just notced something who thinks this is like a war we have team spike and team twilight and now the 2 generals (spike and twilight) are going to have a duel

lone.wolf.117 said:
i just notced something who thinks this is like a war we have team spike and team twilight and now the 2 generals (spike and twilight) are going to have a duel

it's clear that there's going to be 2 genitals (spike and twilight) going to "DUEL" alright... :I

Landocreeper said:
Ok... So how can FLUTTERSHY read thoughts!?!

she assumed it because she saw him jack off on her window.

then she told twilight what she was thinking before spike woke up that morning.

and spike confirmed it when he woke up in the seventh panel here

Fucking Hell. At this point, I don't even care what spike did. Sure it was fucking retarded of him to screw Applebloom, and it was retarded of HER to accept his apology, let alone apologize to HIM.

TWILIGHT however, is being a GRADE-A FUCKING -BITCH-!!!
And Rarity is being a goddamn Hypocrite!

Landocreeper said:
It would be Rarity and Twilight's fault.

Rarity for suggesting to have sex with Spike to begin with.

Twilight for causing all the drama.

I said it once, I'll say it again. This comic went down the SHITTER the moment Twi kicked spike out. As justified as she may have been, NOTHING good could EVER come from something like that. RL dramas do not make for good porn material. >.<

That's not what pisses me off though. It's the fact that, on top of kicking him out, she has the fucking NERVE to start talking shit about spike BEHIND HIS FUCKING BACK! That right there is the sign of an immature cunt! What the hell would that even accomplish??

It would be one thing if spike didn't care about what he did, but he seriously felt bad, [as he SHOULD] and he went to twilight to apologize and ask for HELP. It was a retarded move, don't get me wrong, but for Twilight to go THAT FAR in spite of the circumstances is just ASININE! >:[

Stormshi, I am dissapoint.

INB4 Spike makes the genius decision to go live with the other dragons again! They may be violent jerkwads, but at least they aren't INSANE!

[Roflmao, just kidding. That'll never fucking happen. >.< ]

*Bangs head against the wall*

Well, I've read the last several pages after having avoided the comic for awhile. Yeah, didn't get much better.

Everyone's still OOC, the conversations where painful to read through, and it's still not over.

I almost hate how I saw this coming from the start. Next time, keep the great art, and drop the bad fanfic writing. Or at least make it better. Then everything will be fine.

As it is, if all the comics after this will have a similar writing quality, I'm not even going to bother with them. Hopefully this is the last one (again, sucks since it started nicely).

DJ_COL-7 said:
...

For me, the main problem wouldn't even be the story if the setting was different. My main issue is that this entire story is only possible by forcing the characters to act as OOC as possible. If it wasn't for the horrible characterization showing up almost constantly (along with more conflict balls and idiot balls than anything I've seen before), then it actually wouldn't be that bad. Mainly because it just wouldn't have happened.

You know a story has fallen short when it requires the most contrived circumstances possible just to happen.

TwilightStormshi said:
they're all supposed to be acting stupidly. it's an argument. people are naturally stupid in arguments. i like how people just assume it's bad writing/ooc. parts of the writing -are- bad... but not that one. a lot of people are hooked, so i don't feel too bad. future comics will suck less.

Ignoring the completely overused heat plot hole, I wanted to talk about this part.

Yes, they are acting stupid in an argument. It's what the argument is about that's OOC. You seem to be missing every point of the criticism.

The characters are out-of-character. All of them (Pinkie with Spike and intentionally hurting her friends because of made up reasons, Spike raping Applebloom and then acting freaking surprised, Applebloom just forgiving him, Twilight for kicking him out and not putting any blame on her friends or even suspecting them of being changelings with how strange they're acting, Rainbow for using him, the story itself for saying Spike loved Rarity too much to rape her even though it wasn't that way for AB, etc.) are acting stupid.

So yeah, they're acting stupid in an argument. Everything they say, everything they do goes against everything that defines their character. That's why it's OOC. The stupid arguments are just more contrivances used to force the story along. Which sucks.

TwilightStormshi said:
cuz we wanted to try it. =P it'll be porn again soon (page 59), and the resolution will hopefully make it feel good to fap to again : )

See, this is what I was hoping for, but by this point it doesn't even matter. Even if everything is well in the end, it doesn't change the fact that none of this crap should have happened in the first place, and that it did happen at all just defeats the purpose of a happy ending.

How can I enjoy a happy ending to a story when 99% of the drama that forced it made no sense? "Yay, the story has a happy ending because it stopped forcing the characters to act like cardboard cutouts!"

Anyway, I've said enough. Obviously this story only annoys me with each new page of terrible dialog, and I'm doubting it will get better.

I only hope the next comic will have the great artwork without the stupid drama. Hopefully you got it out of your system, because otherwise I'll just never be able to enjoy the comics by Kitsune again if this is what it will be like.

Sorry.

TheOldOne said:
*shits down my neck*

...yeah, because having them fucking in the first place is totally IN character. which is what got them into the situation in the first place. which is what made it a porn comic.

if you wanna stop reading, be my guest. sorry i disappointed you. maybe you'd like to find kit a better writer. fuck you.

i know i need to improve, but damn. you didn't have to rip my head off about it. what the fuck is your problem?

TwilightStormshi said:
...yeah, because having them fucking in the first place is totally IN character.

that was sarcasm, in case it wasn't clear.

the rest of the message wasn't.

Landocreeper said:
Ok... So how can FLUTTERSHY read thoughts!?!

Hum... she discovered Spike near Rarity's house. I think she have enough logic to do the maths.

Guys... I have 2 theories of what might be going on here.

1) Twilight is jealous that Spike is having sex with other mares (even though she ALLOWED him to), so she planned to kick out Spike so that she can tell everypony in Ponyville (including Rarity) bad things about Spike (that aren't true) so that they lose their trust in Spike (decreasing the chances of having sex with anypony by a LOT), so that he can ONLY have sex with her and her only (which is the most likely).

2) Twilight may have a secret sexual relationship with Fluttershy. "What makes you tthink that?" you may ask? Remember, Fluttershy was still in Twilight's house when she kicked Spike out. And we never see them do anything up to this point or while Spike was asleep. You may think it's because that the comic is suppose to focus on Spike, but if you remember, the first 3 pages of the comic focused on Twilight and her friends concerned about Spike and getting ready for the birthday party. If they showed what happened when Spike wasn't around there, why not here?

Dragonan said:
Hum... she discovered Spike near Rarity's house. I think she have enough logic to do the maths.

But apparently she doesn't have enough logic to close her window curtains before masturbating.

And Rarity has every right to be mad! (sarcasm mode)

Because she is filled with class and sophistication!

See for yourself:http://e621.net/post/show/269341/2012-blue_eyes-blush-crystal_pony_-mlp-cum-cutie_m

And this:http://e621.net/post/show/299060/2013-3-anthro-anus-blush-canine-collar-comic-cutie

And Especially, this:http://e621.net/post/show/248109/abuse-angry-blonde_hair-blue_eyes-blush-bow_tie-br

See!?! VERY LADY-LIKE

so pretty much raritys angry because he thought nasty thoughts about her? shit by that logic men would all be horrible creatures! lol

Landocreeper said:
But apparently she doesn't have enough logic to close her window curtains before masturbating.

Well, she lives in a cottage outside Ponyville, so, except animals, there's nothing around her house. Thus, she doesn't have to worry about other ponies seeing her clopping.

Imaderule34 said:
so pretty much raritys angry because he thought nasty thoughts about her? shit by that logic men would all be horrible creatures! lol

She must be working for Beyonce

Dragonan said:
Well, she lives in a cottage outside Ponyville, so, except animals, there's nothing around her house. Thus, she doesn't have to worry about other ponies seeing her clopping.

Well there was that one time where Rainbow Dash... and That one time where Spike... And there's that one old garderner...

Landocreeper said:
Well there was that one time where Rainbow Dash... and That one time where Spike... And there's that one old garderner...

And Discord is living with her...

i can see fluttershy thinks twilight is going to far, over this thing dose anyone else see it ?

shane995 said:
i can see fluttershy thinks twilight is going to far, over this thing dose anyone else see it ?

Even with my eyes closed.

Th3Shad0w3d0n3 said:
What's with Fluttershy's neck in 9th panel?

nope.avi
http://m.youtube.com/#/watch?v=gvdf5n-zI14&desktop_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3Dgvdf5n-zI14

Th3Shad0w3d0n3 said:
What's with Fluttershy's neck in 9th panel?

nope.avi
http://m.youtube.com/#/watch?v=gvdf5n-zI14&desktop_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3Dgvdf5n-zI14

Thats the problem, you fuck up once and suddenly your entire character is judged and changed permanently. Twilight outright kicked him out, Rarity is calling him a sexual predator even if the thought of her was what shocked spike into stopping. Spike may have been in the wrong but this whole plot made me feel bad for him, not the girls.

Probably the most out-of-character behavior in the whole comic strip. Twilight passing gossip with the intent of getting Rarity angry? Since when did bookhorse become a cheerleader squad diva?