post #397600

Well, quite a few firsts for me this time:

First drawing under 12 hours (was only 4.75 O.O)
First feral.
First full chibi
First pokemon

Feel free to pick apart as you wish.

I know about some errors in the shading, the hair, and the hindleg. Anything else you can see?

Thank you for your time,
Waffles

Imo, the eye has too much outline. Makes it look like it has eyeliner (don't know if you meant to do that or not). The outlines on the tail look a but jagged and rushed. Gotta get those smooooth lines. Other than that, it's nice and decent

9KyksuHehT said:
Imo, the eye has too much outline. Makes it look like it has eyeliner (don't know if you meant to do that or not). The outlines on the tail look a but jagged and rushed. Gotta get those smooooth lines. Other than that, it's nice and decent

Fully agreed on both parts.

The lines have been bugging the hell out of me. I cant seem to win... haha! I put up a piece (look at the other threads) and a lot of people tell me that my lines are too thin. I got a bit thicker, and now I got people saying they are too thick.
I will just have to find that happy medium.

The lines... yes! I have been trying to more and more freehand. Sadly, my hand is no where near as smooth as SAI's curve tool.

I will definitely work on both for my next piece. Thank you for your input!

The mouth seems slightly off-center to me. Somehow it looks like they're somehow only able to open one side of their snout? The rest is cute. And I like the aurora-effect coming from the tv lights into the dark room. I also really like the wood detail you got on that tv stand. And the creature is quite cute. That mouth thing though I just can't unsee.

The upper half's looking pretty good. But the lower half seems kind of scrunched up. Kind of like you were trying to fit it in the canvas.

When you're going from this perspective, choose a simple or well-defined controller. A joystick or NES controller. What you have now looks kinda like an awkward control box.

Other than that, pretty much what other people said. Even up the lines and textures.

if you're going for that kind of style, the mouth definitely needs to be all the way out to the end of the snout- it can't be shorter, else it causes a viewpoint dissonance, unless done very specifically at a specific ratio that is seen in anime (which is, frankly, annoying) and in that particular art style.

Not a fan of the main outer body lining, esp. the thick lining. Much prefer more subtle touches; Underside of the right forepaw is a decent go.

Light streaming from the TV shouldn't be overlayed over the outside box of the TV- light may refract off the wall behind the vulpix, but not the way it's being portrayed here. Controller also looks wonky, but meh.

The fact ears got lined but the chest fur didn't is grating/vice-versa. Same goes for the mouth.

The cut of the mouth also goes far too high on the snout; should be much lower, not so much a glasgow grin. Inside of the mouth is decent though.

Eyes should be shaded a little more fluidly; as is, looks like watercolour fading marks towards the black line around the iris.

Nose also seems like it's slipping down the snout, should be angled a bit back towards the slope of the snout and a bit higher; basically, a right-angle with the snout tip, and a curving slope along the bottom edge of the nose.

Just a quick review.

You need to learn fundamentals. Read what I wrote here and you should get a good idea as to how to improve: https://e621.net/forum/show/83009?page=3