The animations of fay are the highlight by far, her facial and body animations give her a lot of character. I'd love to help you write some dialogue for this.

Not to bad for a first animation, can definitely see the potential in ya'.

I like her! Also, I noticed that you change the tie around her chest, good job. This looks a lot safer.

subtitles can be hot. I dunno what kind of mess you'd think we'd complain about; Fay looks like she can make a nice puddle while getting her butt bred :)

Damn this girl could put out a fire.

keckles said:
The animations of fay are the highlight by far, her facial and body animations give her a lot of character. I'd love to help you write some dialogue for this.

Thanks, sure happy I achieved my goal to give her a bit "life" :)
Can´t promise it will end up in the final version but I sure would love to hear any suggestion/take the help you offered!
(Any way to talk? You have an FA/DA acc or Discord? sure you also will need a bit more context!?)

thatguy75 said:
Not to bad for a first animation, can definitely see the potential in ya'.

Thanks^^
already found quite a few things I have to do differently the next time (ans sure make a few adjustments on next versions of my models^^)
lets see how far this "potential" goes ;)

kaishi said:
I like her! Also, I noticed that you change the tie around her chest, good job. This looks a lot safer.

subtitles can be hot. I dunno what kind of mess you'd think we'd complain about; Fay looks like she can make a nice puddle while getting her butt bred :)

Well even made an post about it on my FA acc (and replied/linked it to your comment under the last pic ;) )
Already a few volunteers who offered to help me with the dialogue, the chances are good :)
well say that to the poor person who had to wipe up the whole mess afterwards...

totsga127 said:
Damn this girl could put out a fire.

Yeah she has quite the talent if stimulated "correctly" ;)

Very nice^^ Keep up the good work. Try playing with 3 point lighting to get an even better result, though, saying that, getting better than what you already have is a mighty task, you've done wonderful!

yvem said:
Thanks, sure happy I achieved my goal to give her a bit "life" :)
Can´t promise it will end up in the final version but I sure would love to hear any suggestion/take the help you offered!
(Any way to talk? You have an FA/DA acc or Discord? sure you also will need a bit more context!?)

I do in fact have an FA, I go by keckles there as well. I haven't been active the past few years on FA due to time constraints but the recent epidemic has given me quite a bit more free time.

To begin with for the dialogue, what kind of tone did you want to get across? More casual, like it's a consensual BDSM situation, or something more along the lines of nonconsensual?

keckles said:
I do in fact have an FA, I go by keckles there as well. I haven't been active the past few years on FA due to time constraints but the recent epidemic has given me quite a bit more free time.

To begin with for the dialogue, what kind of tone did you want to get across? More casual, like it's a consensual BDSM situation, or something more along the lines of nonconsensual?

Kay we could transfer the talks to FA if you like (your acc https://www.furaffinity.net/user/keckles/ ?)
otherwise I just noticed e621 also ha a private message system^^
I will send you an note with a bit context Information this way ;)

Should be something in-between (maybe with a slight tendency to nonconsensual^^) Maybe you will get a better idea out of the note^^

EDIT: seems your e621 pm are deactivated, so I send you the message on FA

fad_drag0n said:
Very nice^^ Keep up the good work. Try playing with 3 point lighting to get an even better result, though, saying that, getting better than what you already have is a mighty task, you've done wonderful!

Thanks, still try my best (maybe not as great as you implied but sure at least acceptable, again thanks for the compliment ;) )

Tried something similar but ended up with strange shadows in my current shader set up...^^
Put these tries on hold for the moment but maybe worth a shot at a later point in combination with more soft/modified shader set ups, Thanks for the input ;)

Let me be honest here, I'm not some kind of "expert" neither an animator myself, i really liked this, you nailed those mouth movements, I'll definitely come back when you add the dialogue.
The only thing you need to work out on your next animation, are the movements of the characters, they look so... Stiff, kinda "Robotic". It's like they were some kind of animatronic's.
I know it's your first animation and I'm NOT saying i don't like it, I'm just pointing something you should work before releasing another one (if you want) And I'm saying this because some people here take criticism a little bit... Outta context. And the critic is not even directed to them.

deadkcoc said:
Let me be honest here, I'm not some kind of "expert" neither an animator myself, i really liked this, you nailed those mouth movements, I'll definitely come back when you add the dialogue.
The only thing you need to work out on your next animation, are the movements of the characters, they look so... Stiff, kinda "Robotic". It's like they were some kind of animatronic's.
I know it's your first animation and I'm NOT saying i don't like it, I'm just pointing something you should work before releasing another one (if you want) And I'm saying this because some people here take criticism a little bit... Outta context. And the critic is not even directed to them.

Yeah I am well aware of the "slight" stiffness^^ (even tried to fix it afterwards but there are just to many individual/dependent motions to fix everything manually...)
Just started with basic keyframes/motions for single body parts, what just ended up with linear motions and sudden transitions while the rest of the body stayed stiff...
Added a bit supporting/additional body movement and in-between steps to fix/improve this... well you can see the result, better but still improvable ;) (just learned you can also adjust the movement/time progression via a graph editor for every single movement... also something I have to consider the next time^^) Maybe just an too long/complex animation for an first try ;)
But so or so learned a few things on the way and already have a few approaches to do things different the next time to hopefully improve on this issues :) (sure feedback will be welcome ;))

But also thanks for the feedback still helps to keep an eye on the mentioned issues after maybe getting a bit too much praise here ;) (Also thanks for the nice words on the thinks you still like^^)
Maybe I can already slightly improve this one via a few small adjustments for the subtitled version, sure always thankful for feedback ;)

yvem said:
Yeah I am well aware of the "slight" stiffness^^ (even tried to fix it afterwards but there are just to many individual/dependent motions to fix everything manually...)
Just started with basic keyframes/motions for single body parts, what just ended up with linear motions and sudden transitions while the rest of the body stayed stiff...
Added a bit supporting/additional body movement and in-between steps to fix/improve this... well you can see the result, better but still improvable ;) (just learned you can also adjust the movement/time progression via a graph editor for every single movement... also something I have to consider the next time^^) Maybe just an too long/complex animation for an first try ;)
But so or so learned a few things on the way and already have a few approaches to do things different the next time to hopefully improve on this issues :) (sure feedback will be welcome ;))

But also thanks for the feedback still helps to keep an eye on the mentioned issues after maybe getting a bit too much praise here ;) (Also thanks for the nice words on the thinks you still like^^)
Maybe I can already slightly improve this one via a few small adjustments for the subtitled version, sure always thankful for feedback ;)

I had literally just a tiny idea of what you said haha, but I'm not that dumb so i kinda understand your problem there, if you look for help/improvement your future animations will be better no doubt. ;3

Neat.

https://youtu.be/m3p_VuPIS2c