I feel the need to compliment the dialogue here. To me, it strikes a good balance between the pitfalls of eloquently verbalizing every single action the two are performing with color commentary and making it just an endless sea of capital M's. They're not really talking dirty, mostly just communicating to be sure they're doing it right (you know, like actual people do), interspersed with noises of pleasure that just sort of happen. And when Shining does say something romantic, Spike acknowledges it's silly but still blushes. Laughter happens with real sex, at least if you do it right.
Reading through this in my head, it genuinely sounds like I'm hearing two people doing it for the first time together: a little awkward, a little nervous and hesitant, but when things line up right, they both go quiet and just enjoy the ride. Kudos.

GarethGobulcoque said:
I feel the need to compliment the dialogue here. To me, it strikes a good balance between the pitfalls of eloquently verbalizing every single action the two are performing with color commentary and making it just an endless sea of capital M's. They're not really talking dirty, mostly just communicating to be sure they're doing it right (you know, like actual people do), interspersed with noises of pleasure that just sort of happen. And when Shining does say something romantic, Spike acknowledges it's silly but still blushes. Laughter happens with real sex, at least if you do it right.
Reading through this in my head, it genuinely sounds like I'm hearing two people doing it for the first time together: a little awkward, a little nervous and hesitant, but when things line up right, they both go quiet and just enjoy the ride. Kudos.

Yeah, I agree, the "bad porn dialogue" keeps very annoying at times and this comic has been very very good with the dialogue. I'm really loving that and the art style.

One thing I will hold against this comic is the "HILT" sound effect. Really, I just shook my head at that one.

vladspellbinder said:
Yeah, I agree, the "bad porn dialogue" keeps very annoying at times and this comic has been very very good with the dialogue. I'm really loving that and the art style.

One thing I will hold against this comic is the "HILT" sound effect. Really, I just shook my head at that one.

That reminds me of Action "sound Effects" Like seeing a comic like Bat man and he hits a guy with his hand it and it goes "Sock!"

GarethGobulcoque said:
I feel the need to compliment the dialogue here. To me, it strikes a good balance between the pitfalls of eloquently verbalizing every single action the two are performing with color commentary and making it just an endless sea of capital M's. They're not really talking dirty, mostly just communicating to be sure they're doing it right (you know, like actual people do), interspersed with noises of pleasure that just sort of happen. And when Shining does say something romantic, Spike acknowledges it's silly but still blushes. Laughter happens with real sex, at least if you do it right.
Reading through this in my head, it genuinely sounds like I'm hearing two people doing it for the first time together: a little awkward, a little nervous and hesitant, but when things line up right, they both go quiet and just enjoy the ride. Kudos.

Gosh, reading this makes me so happy, cause it's exactly what I was hoping to get across. That was really the main goal of this whole comic, to portay that side of real sex that I don't really see all that often. And I'm so, so glad people love it as much as I do.

Thanks a ton!

GarethGobulcoque said:
I feel the need to compliment the dialogue here. To me, it strikes a good balance between the pitfalls of eloquently verbalizing every single action the two are performing with color commentary and making it just an endless sea of capital M's. They're not really talking dirty, mostly just communicating to be sure they're doing it right (you know, like actual people do), interspersed with noises of pleasure that just sort of happen. And when Shining does say something romantic, Spike acknowledges it's silly but still blushes. Laughter happens with real sex, at least if you do it right.
Reading through this in my head, it genuinely sounds like I'm hearing two people doing it for the first time together: a little awkward, a little nervous and hesitant, but when things line up right, they both go quiet and just enjoy the ride. Kudos.

Me: I like this comment.
*accidently hit the down vote button*
Me: nnnnNNNNOOOOOOO!!!

CommanderHurricane said:
Me: I like this comment.
*accidently hit the down vote button*
Me: nnnnNNNNOOOOOOO!!!

YOU HAD ONE JOB. ONE. JOB.

GarethGobulcoque remarked on the surprisingly realistic dialogue in this porn comic.

Agreed. Not even a fan of the ponies, but this is good shit.

StripedOtter said:
I couldn't agree more. In a world where dialogue like Ashchu's "CUUUUUUMMMMMMMMMMMMMM" is the norm, this comic really stands out as great.

How dare you mention... "that"?

AWAY WITH YOU! >:(

Rynir said:
How dare you mention... "that"?

AWAY WITH YOU! >:(

At least it's better than GASHUNK! ;-]

DJ_COL-7 said:
At least it's better than GASHUNK! ;-]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2aegP8j5al0

Shame spike didnt use his tail to poke Shining a few times.

vladspellbinder said:
One thing I will hold against this comic is the "HILT" sound effect. Really, I just shook my head at that one.

That would belong to a trope called the "unsound effect" and is to my knowledge a well-established comic tradition.

I'm super glad that Braeburned, you know... doesn't have that weird porn world. The characters always seem pretty genuine. It's never straight-up sex from the start. There may be a smallish lead up, but it's enough to warrant a situation like this.

They feel like actual beings, I guess is what I wanna say?

GarethGobulcoque said:
"I like the dialogue."

you make a good point through, personally, I find the whole "you got hands" thing kinda corny.

Sweets_MLP said:
I'm super glad that Braeburned, you know... doesn't have that weird porn world. The characters always seem pretty genuine. It's never straight-up sex from the start. There may be a smallish lead up, but it's enough to warrant a situation like this.

They feel like actual beings, I guess is what I wanna say?

that's because he bases it on real life; he's had these sort of experiences IRL so he knows how it really goes.

I know this is FLOODED with comments already but I wanna put my two cents in.

First off yes yall are dead right, the dialog is soooo nice in this, its by leaps and bounds better than anything ive seen so far, its like the one fanfiction someone made that went right ya know?

Now second off I wanted to comment that this is the first comic, porno, anything sexually realated thats accurate about how the guy on top finishes off, most comics, animations, etc they like pull out to just the tip or pull out all together. Now I can say as a guy, when your at the point you dont fuckin wanna pull out, you wanna do that right there, slam in as far as possible and stay there for a while and ride it out. Sure with most animations they want you to see the gallons of cum a furry puts out and all that but honestly I prefer this.

Its like Metal Gear Solid, you want it to be realistic so bad but it happens once a blue moon.

Its 12:38pm, ill stop blabbing.

GarethGobulcoque said:
I feel the need to compliment the dialogue here. To me, it strikes a good balance between the pitfalls of eloquently verbalizing every single action the two are performing with color commentary and making it just an endless sea of capital M's. They're not really talking dirty, mostly just communicating to be sure they're doing it right (you know, like actual people do), interspersed with noises of pleasure that just sort of happen. And when Shining does say something romantic, Spike acknowledges it's silly but still blushes. Laughter happens with real sex, at least if you do it right.
Reading through this in my head, it genuinely sounds like I'm hearing two people doing it for the first time together: a little awkward, a little nervous and hesitant, but when things line up right, they both go quiet and just enjoy the ride. Kudos.

A-MEN. All of this has been so natural and flowing and it's depressing to know that not a lot of yiff/clop comics aren't like this.

I can't help but finding myself coming back to this comic from times to times.
the whole production level it's just so... realistic?
no, i'd say it's very heartfelt, honest. It's like my dream portrayed on a comic.
usually this kind of comics use very cheap gimmicks to get to the action, but you can feel that this is not the case.
Five stars, thumbs up, i bow, you hit the mark Braeburned!
I'm hoping to see the same zeal in giving this feel in your next production too!
( sorry if some parts of this text may sound strange, english is not my first language)

StripedOtter said:
I couldn't agree more. In a world where dialogue like Ashchu's "CUUUUUUMMMMMMMMMMMMMM" is the norm, this comic really stands out as great.

I love it when people refrence that comic xD

GarethGobulcoque said:
-best comment ever-

Sir, you have officially mastered the art of commenting.

Braeburned said:
Gosh, reading this makes me so happy, cause it's exactly what I was hoping to get across. That was really the main goal of this whole comic, to portay that side of real sex that I don't really see all that often. And I'm so, so glad people love it as much as I do.

Thanks a ton!

Your thanking us?! We should be thanking you for making it! Good artwork, good dialog, good everything!

FoxxyTheMedic said:
I love it when people refrence that comic xD

Why not? It's practically become "The Room" of furry sexcomics.

1ncogn3a2 said:
Why not? It's practically become "The Room" of furry sexcomics.

...anyway how's your sex life?

Hahahaha. What a story mark.

there are one of two possibilities here in my honest opnion.

1. braeburn is an absolupte genius in the world of pleasure.

2. he has, unlike many of us, acually had intercourse. so he knows how to properly corrispond the character's reactions and actions in the situation.

3. all of the above.

FoxxyTheMedic said:
Hahahaha. What a story mark.

What comic is that?
I did not hit her it's not true, it's bullshit I did not hit her I did naaawt... Oh hi mark.

jukaro said:
there are one of two possibilities here in my honest opnion.

1. braeburn is an absolupte genius in the world of pleasure.

2. he has, unlike many of us, acually had intercourse. so he knows how to properly corrispond the character's reactions and actions in the situation.

3. all of the above.

from what I've seen him say in asks, it's the second one.

GarethGobulcoque said:
I feel the need to compliment the dialogue here. To me, it strikes a good balance between the pitfalls of eloquently verbalizing every single action the two are performing with color commentary and making it just an endless sea of capital M's. They're not really talking dirty, mostly just communicating to be sure they're doing it right (you know, like actual people do), interspersed with noises of pleasure that just sort of happen. And when Shining does say something romantic, Spike acknowledges it's silly but still blushes. Laughter happens with real sex, at least if you do it right.
Reading through this in my head, it genuinely sounds like I'm hearing two people doing it for the first time together: a little awkward, a little nervous and hesitant, but when things line up right, they both go quiet and just enjoy the ride. Kudos.

If you went up going back to this comment, know that you had fucking massive goodboy points for it.

Love this comic

garethgobulcoque said:
I feel the need to compliment the dialogue here. To me, it strikes a good balance between the pitfalls of eloquently verbalizing every single action the two are performing with color commentary and making it just an endless sea of capital M's. They're not really talking dirty, mostly just communicating to be sure they're doing it right (you know, like actual people do), interspersed with noises of pleasure that just sort of happen. And when Shining does say something romantic, Spike acknowledges it's silly but still blushes. Laughter happens with real sex, at least if you do it right.
Reading through this in my head, it genuinely sounds like I'm hearing two people doing it for the first time together: a little awkward, a little nervous and hesitant, but when things line up right, they both go quiet and just enjoy the ride. Kudos.

Completely entirely agree, it's my favorite kind of comic, like finding diamond when just searching for iron.
I wish there was some kind of tag to find more of this more easily, unless there is one